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Five-Sentence Story Contest Winner!

posted by Jason Boyett

Congratulations to Ted Slater, the winner of yesterday’s Five-Sentence Scary Story Contest. Honorable Mention goes to Lauren Sawyer, who also had an excellent entry.

To recap, I posted a photo of an unknown family standing in front of the world’s largest ball of twine in Darwin, Minnesota. I asked for a scary story to be written about the photo. Rules: the story had to have only five sentences, and it had to use the name Jimmy.

I was thrilled with the results. Some of you are really good writers — especially when it comes to establishing a mysterious and/or foreboding tone.

Why did Ted win? Though being longish in length, his story was very tight. It was bookended with the same creepy phrase (“Jimmy had a secret”). It contained a paragraph-length sentence held together with semicolons — a genius move. It had a dog named Scraps and the phrases “inglorious death” and “doorless tribal hut.” Nice work, Ted. (We shouldn’t be surprised: Ted is a publishing professional.)

Here’s his submission, along with the photo:

Jimmy Had a Secret

Jimmy had a secret.

He was well-acquainted with the legends surrounding the mysterious doorless tribal hut, had read all about it in the latest issue of National Geographic Kids. The stories of those who had merely brushed up against its fibrous exterior, all doomed to spiral into a mind-twisting dementia and an eventual and inglorious death.

He thought of his father, who had asked him (for the last time) to stop asking if we were there yet; of his mother, whose penchant for country music had grown wearisome; of his sister, who kept touching his leg in the car; of his brother, who never, ever let him hold Scraps, their pet dog.

And all this left Jimmy giddy in anticipation, for Jimmy had a secret.

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Shiver.

Congrats, Ted. Expertly done. Shoot me an email with shipping address and I’ll send you a book.

And great job, Lauren, who managed to work a creepy orphan, creepy nuns, a request to the gods, and the freezing of a soul into her story. Very nice.

Let’s do this again sometime. It was fun.

(And if you happen to know the people in that photo, you might check up on them. I’ve got a bad feeling about that kid with the dog.)



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Deb

posted May 15, 2009 at 12:07 pm


Brilliant. Let’s do this again.



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Lauren Sawyer

posted May 15, 2009 at 12:47 pm


Well, I already have a copy of Pocket Guide to the Bible anyway.



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Lauren Sawyer

posted May 15, 2009 at 12:52 pm


Oh, that last comment sounded bitter. I’m not bitter. Thanks for the opportunity, Jason!



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Jason Boyett

posted May 15, 2009 at 1:27 pm


No worries, Lauren. I loved your entry…I just loved Ted’s a little bit more.



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Jamie

posted May 15, 2009 at 2:02 pm


These were my favorite too! I’d like to hear Christopher Walken narrate Jimmy Had a Secret.



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Ted Slater

posted May 18, 2009 at 1:33 pm


Jamie — Great idea. Of course, he’d have to incorporate cowbell somewhere into his recitation….



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